Presentation Feedback

Just got feedback from the presentations we did last thursday.

Good

• Fairly well presented
• The opening 2 mins sound good and would certainly intrigue an audience

Bad

• Danger of audience being overloaded in opening, dont need to tell the whole story.
• Didnt seem 100% passionate about your idea. <--- Because I was Nervous!
• Needed to mention audience research sooner.
• Needed to be prompted to reveal more ideas/info.

From this feedback i will definatly have a look back at my idea and tweak little bits to the opening. I think that in my presentation i was quite boring because i was reading off the sheet, thats why they didnt think i was passionate. Also I dont think i was as prepared for the presentation as i could have been, because i only finished it the night before. Also i was the second person in, so i didnt have much time to prepare.

Overall i am quite pleased with how it went, because the main critisisms were just about the presentation, not the actual film.

My Audience

My audience is open to 16-24 and even older, because of the story. it is also open to ABC1 and C2DE

Film Synopsis

The Story

The story so far with some adjustments...

The CIA have a top secret underwater base in the Arctic Ocean to spy on the Russians after recent military activity. The oil rig operators have no idea about the secret base under the platform. Mike Smith is a father and a husband, but is suspected of being an undercover Russian sent to gather information about the CIA's secret base. The CIA kidnap Mike and torture him to extract information about his suspected identity. The CIA decide he is too much of a threat to keep alive so they kill him, and blow up their secret base and the oil rig as a cover for his death. They tell his wife, Julie Smith and her young son. Julie can see images on the news of the burning oil rig and realises her husband is dead. The young boy grows up and joins the army - like his dad, and goes through and gets out 15 years later. He decides that he wants to find out more about his fathers death when he was younger, and uses his contacts in the army to get his more in-depth file. He finds out that his dads body was never found and that he dissapeared a week before the explosion.  intrigued by this discovery he digs deeper, and finds about the CIA base, and he travels to america to find the truth. Meanwhile his digs into secret files doesn't go un-noticed and the CIA decide to silence him before he finds out too much.

Film Pitch "No. 6"

So it starts with a wide shot of a street of houses, they all look the same, so it gives the look of a boring neighbourhood where nothing interesting happens. you can hear two people speaking, a woman and a man at a parting moment, she says "will you be ok?" he says "dont worry i will be back before you know it, i love you" over the top as the camera moves towards no.6. you can see the street name, and the house is at the end. there is a brief shot of the house number and you go through the window to see a woman in the lounge crying, there is footage of a burning oil rig on the tv which is on mute, and she is sitting on the sofa with a phone in her hand, and you can hear an answerphone of the mans voice you heard earlier.

a boy with a toy in his hand peeks round the door, and you zoom into his eyes and then it ends in a white flash, which in the rest of the film would cut to 20 yrs later and he is an adult.

•The story is based around an oil rig explosion, which kills ‘mike’ who is the father of the main character will. This disaster leaves will fatherless and he grows up wanting to find who caused his fathers death. After research he finds that it was actually a terrorist attack that caused the explosion and he is out to seek revenge…

idea?

have a radio playing as a woman is in the kitchin (gender stereotype) hear on radio that there are two rapists/murderers? one has been caught but one still on the loose?

another idea, radio playing, business owner hears on radio that there are terrorists blowing up buildings but making it look like an accident. newspaper on table saying 'investigators not clear on cause of explosion' picture like  <- this on front cover.

he can have a back board with pictures of his company?
did a deal with dodgey people? want payback?



ANOTHER IDEA

have a guy getting ready to go to work on an oil rig?
hears radio saying there has been an uncovered plot to blow up oil rigs? family scared?

go to norwich airport, see helicopter fly over? waxam beach see some fly over?
family leaving, see paper on table with front page with plot to destroy on front?


ok same theme but maybe START with seeing a woman with the tv on, footage from oil rig burning, she is crying with a phone in her hands? have over the top a answerphone message? want to know what happens?

opening thoughts

just watched 127 hours... awesome film, anyway opening was a sped up view of a underground station, liverpool street station and just crowds just all sped up, and i really liked that idea, because the screen was split into 3, and there was the main characters life going on, and then it was swapping between the underground, the station and crowds while his life was going on, im not sure how we could do that but it would certainly be cool...

timewarners takeover of british publisher IPC media has given the NME brand a new lease of life. Discuss.

timewarner is an american company and has a huge empire, owning things like disney.  timewater can extend NME to america therfor increwasing profits because the audience has widened hugely from the introduction to the states. NME started as a small british music magazine but has expanded in popularity massivly. advancing tecnology has put NME magazinesa under strain because IPC Media are not selling as many magazines because people are going online to read the magazines more.

the joining of timewarner with IPc media can synergise magazines so amewrican magazines and british magazines can extend to different countries, and broaden the market, therefor making much more money. also timewarmer can advertise films that timewarner have created, therefore increasing profits because a new audience is being advertised too.

NME is hugely popular in the states already, with 2 clubs (NME NYC and NME LA), a radio station that provides 24 hour news coverage and music, and also NME.com, which is americas third most popular website. NME is also having a complete makeover, covering more indepth stories and having a new layout for their website. 

with NME's huge empire into europe and britain, timewarner is making a massive investment into the synergy of ipc media and timewarner. timewarner now has a world wide audicence, and big influence in society.  most of NME's audience is young people, age ranging from 15-34.